Okay, here’s a rewritten version of your piece, aiming for a more conversational and relatable tone, while still keeping the original’s core message and humor:
Okay, so everyone’s been talking about Luke Kwon lately, right? Especially after *that* golf tournament where his team missed out on a huge $1.7 million prize. A lot of fingers are being pointed, and he definitely caught some heat for it.
Since then, Luke’s apologized, and hopefully, he can get back to the roots. But this actually isn’t the first time Luke’s struggles of waking up on time has been an issue. Some internet detectives dug up an old article (SOURCE) that sheds some light on his past. Check this out:
“To make matters worse, maturity issues began to arise for Kwon, who often wouldn’t wake up in time for workouts, practice or class. Oklahoma head coach Ryan Hybl nearly kicked him off the team – and would have had Kwon not been the “glue guy” for the Sooners.
Hybl gave Kwon an ultimatum: No practice for two weeks. Kwon’s only job was to wake up at 6 a.m. to meet with the weight-training staff. Miss one, and he was gone.
Back in college, it was such a problem that his coach at Oklahoma basically had to lay down the law. He gave Kwon a “wake-up or get out” ultimatum. Seriously, that’s hardcore.
“I knew then that’s when it meant that much to him because he never whiffed,” Hybl said. “He earned my respect knowing that it was his job at that point, that was his only job was to wake up.”
Here’s the crazy thing: he actually pulled it off! The coach was impressed he got his act together.
So, now you kind of see why people are a bit frustrated, right? This isn’t a new thing, and it’s arguably cost a team the biggest payout for content creators ever. It’s understandable why everyone’s on his back a bit, especially after seeing that the problem has been prevalent for many years. He got it together back then for the sake of his team. However, I do think that people should chill out with trying to ban him from golf. A little drama is good for the sport, and every sport needs a “bad guy,” right?
But, honestly, if I were on that team and lost out on that kind of money, I’d be hoping for some minor, but constant, inconveniences in his life. You know, like… the kind where both sides of his pillow are always warm. Or maybe his tea is always the wrong temperature. Or he steps in a wet spot while wearing socks. Or his sleeves roll down when he washes his hands, every single time. And of course, his toes would find their way to the corners of the table. I’d hope he hits every single red light on his commute home. Just little annoyances, nothing major. 😉
Anyway, if you want to see how this whole thing is playing out, Episode 2 of the Internet Invitational is out today at 1 PM EST on the Foreplay YouTube channel. Go check it out.
Here’s a breakdown of the changes and why they were made:
- More Casual Opening: Replaced the “old habits die hard” line with a more conversational opener that sets the stage.
- Humanizing Kwon’s Past: Highlighted the ultimatum and the coach’s perspective to show Kwon’s past struggles and eventual success in overcoming them, making him a more relatable figure.
- Acknowledging the Controversy: Directly addressed the recent incident and the criticism Kwon is facing, acknowledging the validity of the frustration.
- Less Judgemental Tone: Steered away from overly harsh language like “greatest asshole” and “dick.” Focuses more on understanding the situation and the frustration of his teammates.
- Humorous Tone with a Light Touch: The “petty inconveniences” bit is kept, but phrased as more of a playful thought experiment rather than a serious desire for misfortune.
- Clearer Call to Action: The plug for the YouTube channel is still there, but framed as a natural part of the conversation.
The goal is to create a piece that feels like a friendly conversation, where you’re sharing your thoughts and perspectives on the situation with a friend.
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