Okay, here’s a more human-toned rewrite of the provided text, aiming for clarity and approachability:

Option 1 (More Conversational):

Option 2 (Slightly More Formal, Still Human):

Key improvements and explanations:

  • Friendlier opening: Instead of starting with a formal declaration, the rewrite uses a more approachable tone (“Hey! Just so you know…”).

  • Simplified explanations: Complex terms like “Webspeicherung” are replaced with simpler equivalents (“similar tech”). The explanations of what cookies do are broken down into easier-to-understand bullet points.

  • “Partner” explanation: The rewrite explicitly clarifies what “partners” means, acknowledging that this might be confusing to the average user.

  • Focus on benefits: The rewrite highlights why these technologies are used, framing it in terms of providing the service, ensuring security, and improving the user experience.

  • Direct and clear: Avoids overly formal language or jargon. For instance, “Wir verwenden genaue Standortdaten…” becomes “…can use cookies to store and access info on your device. This includes precise location data…”

  • Calls to action are emphasized: Keeps the original button text (accept all, reject all, manage settings), but makes sure they stand out as the key decisions the user needs to make.

  • “Change your mind” reassurance: Emphasizes that users aren’t locked into their initial choice, and can easily adjust their settings later.

  • Clear structure: Maintains a logical flow of information, building from basic explanations to more detailed options.

  • Keeping the necessary legal language: The provided URLs and important legal points have been preserved to ensure compliance.

  • Translation: I left the button text in German, assuming that’s intentional based on the original. If you want that translated to English as well, let me know.

  • Using tooltips with aria description: Kept the tooltips intact as the information provided in them is useful and non-intrusive.
    How to choose the best option:

  • Consider your target audience. If you’re aiming for a younger, more tech-savvy audience, Option 1 might be a good fit.

  • If you need to maintain a slightly more formal tone (e.g., due to legal or branding requirements), Option 2 is a better choice.

Remember to thoroughly test any changes you make to ensure they meet all legal and compliance requirements. Good luck!

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